Thank you for including the proposed first draft. I’d use will instead of shall, and instead of putting in the characteristics, which don’t include information about Unity, I’d put in a link to the characteristics page.
Good summation of the editorial bias. I wonder if sending the summation to the Wikipedia main editors would help. I don’t presume evil on the part of Wikipedia, just human characteristics in the editors, who I do presume to be cajolable, if not confrontable, to net positive effect.
