Note that I have dropped this sentence:
To finance the research needed, we will raise funds from the general public and publicize the need for funding of research aimed at developing this ideal energy source.
I think “finance the research needed” is covered by “developing and promoting effective strategies, initiatives and policies that support diverse approaches to fusion research”;
“we’ll raise funds from the general public” is limiting – we’ll be raising it from foundations and government as well.
“…this ideal energy source” is a promise on unproven technology. It’s not ideal until proven – so at this point we’re in a catch 22. Need to prove it first before you can get the $ to prove it.
The goal is to get the money and resources to explore this option, and other fusion options beyond that, in the event this doesn’t work.
Does that cover all our bases? Can we make it vaguer, yet clear?